Hello Nanda!
First, your play was already cleverly conceived before our first meeting. You are one of those playwrights whose plays are written in full inside one's head so that, when they are ready to be written, they just flow onto hard copy. After our discussion session, electronic dramaturgy, the videotaped, informal reading that I watched with you, and our restructuring, your play is finally finished. It was interesting to dramaturge because it is the second of a trilogy, the first already written and staged, the third, yet to be written. Still, it must be able to stand up as an independent piece--and it does.
A few comments:
--I noted the additions you made to contribute to the sensual atmosphere of the play.
--All of the roles are vehicles for fine, ensemble acting. I wonder, though, whether a static, staged reading will diminish their impact.
--The play is too long. Act 3 seems to have the most tolerable length. I suggest that you read it aloud (or do so again with the help of your friends) and time each act. Tighten the play: make your cuts now rather than wait for the director to make cuts you might not agree with.
Then proofread your manuscript, make a clean copy, and submit it to TheatreWorks for a staged reading.
Well done!
First, your play was already cleverly conceived before our first meeting. You are one of those playwrights whose plays are written in full inside one's head so that, when they are ready to be written, they just flow onto hard copy. After our discussion session, electronic dramaturgy, the videotaped, informal reading that I watched with you, and our restructuring, your play is finally finished. It was interesting to dramaturge because it is the second of a trilogy, the first already written and staged, the third, yet to be written. Still, it must be able to stand up as an independent piece--and it does.
A few comments:
--I noted the additions you made to contribute to the sensual atmosphere of the play.
--All of the roles are vehicles for fine, ensemble acting. I wonder, though, whether a static, staged reading will diminish their impact.
--The play is too long. Act 3 seems to have the most tolerable length. I suggest that you read it aloud (or do so again with the help of your friends) and time each act. Tighten the play: make your cuts now rather than wait for the director to make cuts you might not agree with.
Then proofread your manuscript, make a clean copy, and submit it to TheatreWorks for a staged reading.
Well done!
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