Writing from The Heart: Dramaturgy for TheatreWorks Singapore: Beverly (Three-Character Version)

Writing from The Heart

"Writing from The Heart" is a workshop on creative writing, creative drawing, and creative drama. There are three available versions of this workshop: one for beginners on the secondary, tertiary, and graduate levels, and another for practitioners. A third version of this workshop is designed as an outreach program to disadvantaged and underserved audiences such as the disabled, the poor and the marginalized, victims of human trafficking, battered women and abused children, drug rehabilitation center residents, child combatants, children in conflict with the law, prisoners, and gang leaders. This third version incorporates creativity and problem awareness, conflict resolution, crisis intervention, trauma therapy, and peacemaking.

Monday, January 5, 2015

Dramaturgy for TheatreWorks Singapore: Beverly (Three-Character Version)

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Version with three characters

Hi Beverly!

I will read the version with four characters in a while.

In the meantime here are my comments on this version:

--The play is excellent. It is a thorough and mature articulation of love between adults in relationships and a serious attempt to arrive at a definition of love.

--Page 5, Line 13: The line is not too extreme. It is, actually, your point of attack.

--Page 7, Line 9: Not contrived.

--Page 8, Line 13: The alternate wording is better.

--Page 31, Line 2: It will become evident during the performers' reading, which is when a playwright adjusts his dialogue, but always be alert to theatrical phraseology. Your line "Besides your art" will not project well inside a theater. Rewriting it to "Aside from your art" will. Recite the two and hear the difference.

--Page 56, Lines 1 - 4: Delete.

--Page 62, Lines 9 - 10: Dialogue is better as opposed to mimicry. Mimicry does not go with Dan's character.

--End of play: Beautiful! The first ending is so much better; the second, lame.

You may proceed to make these changes and present a clean copy to TheatreWorks Singapore.